After reading my peer feedback on my essay, I have to say he made some very good points; I already knew that I needed to provide more concrete examples, specifically relating to the 4-H club, but did not realize until he pointed it out that i went a little crazy on the prepositions in my paper, and could definitely tone them down a lot. He also correctly pointed out that my paper lacked an ending, which, since I am writing an argumentative paper, is necessary to wrap up my argument. Overall, I felt like the feedback I received contained good advice, and I will use it to improve my paper and my argument, in order to target my specific audience, the youth of America.
Drag like White Lightning and keep your covers out of the microwave,
C/ STANTON
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